Allow me the walk I crave
Inside your mind
Each and every day
Born of a lovely sunrise
Let me be near
The comfort I desire
The sigh I wait
All day to hear
Inside an aching sunset
Let me be near
Thinking of you easily
I’m trying to please
Working towards all you need
Keeps me dreaming
Let me be near
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Really like the first stanza, Audrey, the mix of the concrete and abstract. Nice rhythm, pace, lovely voice.
Thank you, Diana. I welcome you. Thanks for stopping by. That was my favorite part of the poem, as well. I appreciate your comment and hope to get to know you better.
***I just read your take on poetry. I use a lot of -ing, and used sun-kissed just a few weeks ago, as I thought it was a silly throwback. I hope you weren’t to disappointed with my efforts here. I’m not a trained poet, however, I love writing it.
Have a blessed day.
Audrey
Keep writing. =) And I look fwd to building a friendship.
Thank you, Diana
That’s a fantastic title, too. I think a roar would have gone quite nicely at the end.
Thank you, Duke. Because I was so mad when I wrote it? I may not have been mad, you know. Just wishful.
The roar is a nice touch. Sends the message home… *laughs*
Oh, I roar all the time. I could sense your attitude, I think!
Yes, I’ve seen you do it. It wasn’t really an attitude!! I was being wishful, not attitudish. You are mean.
How can I become sweeter?
I don’t know how a wicked professor could possibly become sweeter without ruining hiself. You are far too important.
Maybe it has to do with the purple dragon tongue.
I think it may have everything to do with that, actually. What do we do about it?
Have a red lollipop?
I will. I want the one wrapped up in suprise paper. The professor doesn’t get the rootbeer lollipop I have behind my back.
Rats! But why not?
*hands it over* I was being mean. Tisn’t becoming of me. Sorry.
*laughing* It was an interest…
*laughs* Yes, I know.
Let me be near, dear Audrey 😛
Oh, Niko! Say that to me in Italian. .. 😉 Haha!!
In Italian it would be: “permettimi di starti vicino”‘ sounding as: (per-mé-ttee-mé dee star-tee vee-cee-no) 🙂
Thank you, Niko. 🙂
A hug, dear 🙂
Thank you!
🙂
That’s a beauty, Audrey, a real gem of a poem.
Thank you, Richard. I like gems…you keep this one close by. Hope it helps you smile.
I will 🙂
Good 🙂
I do truly enjoy the phrase “inside an aching sunset,” Audrey. I love the contrasting twist of my usual expectations on the onset of a day.
Thank you! I love how my poems make you think, Mark. Have a great day.
Oh, so very beautiful! 🙂
Thank you, Line. So very much. 🙂