I took a drive to the island. With more willingness than I thought possible of myself, I approached an unsafe area opting to stop and park. Not the best area to be alone in, yet I walked. Fear didn’t fill me. Strange. I’ve always been scared. I took pictures of brokenness everywhere. Randomly. I left. I drove away feeling slightly amused that nothing dangerous had happened. Silly girl, usually afraid of her own shadow.
The ferry took me over to the peninsula, and not many people were headed there so late in the day. My white Charger parked in the middle row, as if allowing the other cars on board to hug her tightly. I climbed the stairs, stood outside, and allowed the wind to blow through my hair. Where did I think I was going? I smelled the salty air. I closed my eyes. I was in pursuit. Not of myself, really, but of myself, truly.
I drove the main road for miles, listened to John Legend’s You And I on repeat, then I abruptly decided to stop the car. I placed my flip-flops on the hood and proceeded to wonder while walking the beach, I read the waves and settled my brain.
Following closely
Seashells show the journey long
Get me out of here
(I completely understand that the pronoun ‘I’ isn’t normally used in the Haibun prose, but I couldn’t keep from using it. Hope it doesn’t ruin the effort.) Critics are welcome! Please…
I really enjoyed this and for a while thought you had escaped ………. It was deep really deep! 🙂
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Thank you, Willow. You see many things, my friend.
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🙂 xxx
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🙂 xxx
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Loved this, Audith! I think the use of “I” gave it a very personal spin–which is awesome. My favorite line: I was in pursuit. Not of myself, really, but of myself, truly.
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Thank you, Duke. I appreciate your support on this one. My first try. *smiles* It is my favorite line, too. The big reveal, as they say. (I really think like that, you know.)
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I know you do. Definitely do more of these. I like the structure.
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Okay, I will, for you. (You like the little bits of information you get, don’t you?)
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You mean of you? Yes! Lots, actually. I think the professor is nebby.
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*smiles lots* I think the professor uses words that Audith doesn’t understand, so she had to bing it…that could mean many things, Duke.
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But it means only one thing, you know. Horribly inquisitive!
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Yes, that is what I thought. I’m too!
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I think it’s a Pittsburgh word.
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Yes, tis. You speak another language there, huh?
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Actually, I don’t usually do it at all. (Just said that to see what you’d think.) The professor lives about 20 miles from Pittsburgh.
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(You sent me in a wild goose chase. *honks*) A small town boy or country boy?
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(I would have told you!) Umm…probably closer to small town. Though I do live out in the country in a way.
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(I know, but I liked looking it up. I want to seem smart.) I would have never believed that you were small town.
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Good job at a Haibun. What exactly is a Haibun? I’m becoming very interested lately in poetic forms and all, and am wanting to branch out. Today I took a leap and created my first eteree.
🙂
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Staci, its a written prose (50-200 words) with a haiku at the end. Neither really relating to each other but extending the thought. Its a nice challenge and actually one I felt very comfortable with…so thanks for the praise. I will check yours out!!
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Wow, I’m impressed Audrey! I’ve not embraced the Haibun challenge yet, too much of a wuss.
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….are you being serious? Its okay? I’m a wus, too. Time to try some of these, ya know. Thanks, Starr.
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Yes, it’s good. I’m kinda busy trying to stay on the planet, so haibuns aren’t on my current to-do list. Maybe next year…
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Haha…yeah, I probably left the planet, Starr. Hope all is okay. Ok. Next year, for sure.
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Loved the poem–and your linguistic comment. I’m intrigued by those types of cultural variations in language.
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Thank you, Jacqui. I am, too. I enjoyed writing this one.
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So beautiful 😉 Im heading off to the beach this week and will be reminded of this when I am there 🙂
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Thank you, Morgan! I’m thrilled you find this piece beautiful. Have a fantastic time at the beach!! 🙂
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I am hoping to 🙂 rain or shine!
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It’ll be great! Dancing on the beach in the rain is never frowned upon…y’all will be fine. 🙂
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If it does rain, as long as its not raining cats and dogs and monkeys, I shall wander out for a splash through the puddles just for you 😀
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Haha!! Yes, please do, Morgan. Enjoy!!
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I am liking it very much, Audrey, as unfamiliar — and unconcerned with the parameters of the Raibun prose as I am. I’d rather thing of beach, breeze and settled brain.
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Thank you, Mark. I think I would, too. It felt nice being there…
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