scanning tonight
years of my poetry
my fear realized, normal
and I am;
utterly cliché.
alas,
its the chardonnay
or I’ve tricked
myself, again,
into believing
I, extraordinary.
in awe
watching the glass
fill itself,
as I fall, once again,
for Pablo Neruda,
and settle in,
knowing he understands.
Neruda is a great master, you can’t do any better, but, no, Audrey Dawn, you are not ordinary.
Please suffer this question: is it a gooseberry?
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Thank you, Shari.
‘Tis a gooseberry! So sour..
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A) I like the old Chilean Communist. B) I like the new format. C) I love the poem
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You have the best sense of humor, Sir Richard.
*curtseys* A) I think he knows what he wants and I find that perfect. B) Thank you so much…I hope it’s readable. And pay no mind to the photo sizes I don’t know how to size them!!! (After 4 years you’d think I’d have time to figure it out.) C) I’m thankful you do. I may or may not have been drunk when I wrote it.
I was. 😉
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I don’t think your poems are cliched. I’ve felt an honesty in them, and that’s far from rehashing some tired stuff. It’s dangerous to compare yourself to published writers who stand on pedestals (although I’m guilty of doing this). Healthier to sip the Chardonnay and meditate on if you are improving as a writer, and striving to tell a good poem (or story).
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August MacGregor! You’ve been a loyal reader for a long time. I am always thrilled to see you in my comments section. Your wisdom, offered generously and with honesty, is always welcome. I’m in good company with you around. Yes, thank you for the soft nudge not to go too far when criticizing my ability.
Wonderful to see you, Gus ♡
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You’re welcome for that nudge. They’re helpful. Believe me, I can get overly critical of my own writing at times. Thankfully, it passes after a while, and I refocus.
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Yes, it always passes and it’s a sign of dedication and true ability, I think. Glad to see you, Gus
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Beautifully done, Audrey. I have no flare for poetry, but I do know what pleases me. I love this one. Hugs.
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I appreciate your honesty, Teagan. My poetry isn’t always a first choice, as I often do not follow some of the most important rules, but I feel it reaches myself and those who happen by it. Thank you for the encouragement. Hugs to you! 🤓
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Love his poetry.
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I do, too. Remarkable poet. Thank you, Susan
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You both have the theme of true love in your work. Super stuff. (Pablo has a nice sense of humor)
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An honor to have a similar theme threading. Thank you, John. (Yes, he does and you know humor is important.)
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It is.
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Have a great day, John. Hope you enjoyed the weekend with your dear friend.
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I did indeed. Thanks, Audrey.
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Glad to hear it. I’m missing many of my Texas friends and you mentioning your friend’s visit made me realize I need to make some plans. I need a Texas fix. Darned if I don’t miss that place. 😉
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You should. It is God’s country.
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Tis, indeed. Sigh
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Two excellent poems. You are far from ordinary.
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Always is one of my favorites. Thank you, Dan
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Your words honest, the other poem likewise. I like them both.❤️
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Thank you, my friend ♡
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💜❤️💝
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