Hey, y’all. So the second half of the excerpt I wanted to share with you will post this morning.
I probably read similar content inside Danielle Steele’s novels in high school, but just to be sure I’m protecting anyone who happens upon my blog for the first time by making the excerpt private.
Imagine that post being the first words they read. Phew! I’d be setting expectations a bit high from then on, I think. We all know I’m just a messy poet.
Now, to warn you all. This is two characters, Amelia and Jake, having sex. I’m not going to sugarcoat it for you. It’s raw. Now, that being said, they are two multidimensional human beings on a life boat ethics quest, and they love each other very much.
I believe this novel to be more than the scene I provide here. Nonetheless, I guess I need to show you who I am as a writer, thinker and woman. First, you should know, I’m capable of writing more than 29 words, and in the end this novel is where my thoughts are hidden.
Enjoy.
Shoot me an email, hide your request for the password in a comment of an old post of mine or….concentrate really hard and I’ll get your request telepathically, which honestly only works for a few of you, so don’t hold your breath. 😉 ♡
Not sure why the song, Will You Still Love Me Tomorrow, continues to play in my head, but I’m fairly certain I feel like this could end like a bad one night stand. I won’t hate you if you cannot look me in the eye tomorrow.
So now I’m rambling because I’m nervous…you’d think we were about to have sex.
I warned y’all that I was bashful.
Okay. Okay. Okay. It’s fine, I know. We’re all educated adults…I’m blushing. I wrote this and now I want you to read it. I need the honest feedback. I know there are plenty of mistakes, but does the scene create an honest emotion in you? Were you bored? Is the interest there to want to continue?
I wanted the scene to be sensitive and without a lot of description apart from their moment.
Anyway, this is it. I am tired of the draft in my Posts section whispering to me… “Audrey, publish me.”
Don’t look at me…No, do! Hard. Eye contact. Lots of it. Okay. Have I talked you out of reading this? I hope not.
Wink.
Well, I need this password!
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Ask and you shall receive. Thank you, Ben
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Oh, Audith, don’t be that nervous! You’re fine. Really.
But I’m interested in the telepathic thingy…that’s an interest, you know.
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Thanks, Duketh. You have no idea.
Oh. Yeah, I haven’t mentioned that before, huh? *smiles*
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No, you haven’t! But I say, it’s very nice. There’s just lots of nerve-wracking things in the world, I suppose. It’s a bit vexing, you must admit.
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Ahh, yes, well I suppose it has to do with proper instinct. Thank you. Completely vexing.
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Yes, that’s it. Vexing.
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You’re vexing.
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Why am I vexing, dadblameit?
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*gives you a mirror* See!
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Look at the size of that scar!
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What scar? Where? Do you have one? I have on under my chin from falling off my bike on a gravel road.
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Do you really? That would have hurt. I think I have one…right below my eye. I was playing football some years ago…went up to grab a ball…and a fence post was there. Haven’t I told you this?
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Yes, I really do. My big brother was teaching me how to skid my tire. I skidded and then went flying over my handle bars. I had stiches! *proud face*
Yes, you told me and I said you could have died playing that crazy game.
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*laughs* He’s wicked, I say! I knew it. Yeah, I mean, it’s possible.
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He was just being a good brother and tried to teach me something. I was the one who failed. Tis possible… *nods*
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How can I get the password ?
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All you had to do was ask. Thank you.
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I tried open sesame
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Mmm, are you a magician?
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Apparently not, then I tried please but I’m not a gentleman either
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FYI Please would never work on me.
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I’ll remember that the best way to get you open is not to ask
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You’re getting closer.
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I’ll also tell you with a very clear tone
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That’s a little better
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I’m full of surprises lol, be careful
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Thanks for the warning.
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Anytime
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Audrey, the last thing I’d want to do is hurt your feelings, but I’m going to have to pass. I don’t read explicit sex scenes, so I’d be a very poor judge of whether this one is any good or not. Don’t hate me, okay? There’s lots I don’t read — literary fiction, memoirs, etc. — so I’d be a lousy judge of that as well. That said, I think you’re very brave to ask for critiques, though I know you’re among friends here!
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Never any pressure to read, Debbie. I wanted to protect anyone who wasn’t interested. No worries. Truly.
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Looking forward to it. 😉 xxx
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Thank you, Willow
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Hey people, ask Audrey for the password and go read the scene — it’s a great one!
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Thanks, Gus. I appreciate your support.
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