She Can Have You

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Don’t bother comparing,
Simply won’t do,
They share similar parts,
But totally different hues.
Confessing to you now,
She’ll definitely shine for you.
Sensing your internal struggle,
Trying to decide between the two.
Knowing your confidence all too well,
I’ll offer, what I know to be true.
Crimson prefers to continue blooming,
If Sunshine owns any part of you.

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32 thoughts on “She Can Have You

  1. This one had me curious, as I wasn’t sure how the title fit into the poem. In contrasting the yellow to the crimson flower, the crimson one will bloom longer? Sorry to be a blockhead about this one πŸ™‚

    • Okay, I totally f’ed this poem up and I’m fairly pissed about it because I really wanted to get my point across and I failed. See what I mean about my poetry sucking lately, Gus? I wanted to paint the picture of a man unable to make a decision about choosing the right girl. Possibly in love with two at the same time. I wanted to close by saying the red one would rather not bother if the yellow one has any part of his heart. Does that make sense?

    • Ah, yes — that does make sense. Talk about struggles, that’s a tough one to craft a poem (or a story). And for the guy who could be in love with two women, that sounds like it would also be a tough struggle. As I wrote in my other comment, I hope your poetry writing struggle has calmed. πŸ™‚

    • I think tough for all involved. I was pushing my thoughts a bit too far, maybe not grasping the emotion enough. I try to take myself out of my poetry sometimes, you know, write myself out of the picture, and they never seem to produce the same effect. I should stick to true feelings. Fictional poetry is tougher for me, I guess. Thanks…it will. πŸ™‚

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