Silence is the result of what you’ve requested
Requested and desired are two different directions
Directions are explicit commands I submit to freely
Freely is how I materialize for you in your dreams
Dreams are the light during my darkest time
Time is all I’ve ever asked for, bashfully
Bashfully is the only way I know how
How is the question that will continue a circle
Circle is the shape for the ring of promise
Promise is the agreement of pinky fingers
Fingers grasp tightly, an act of true love
Love rarely survives the quiescient sound of being dismissed
Dismissed hearts will never answer to silence
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I enjoyed trying this style originally found on Benjamin’s blog: The Breakdown of Taboo – Leftovers. Thank you, Benjamin, for the permission to give this poetic form a try.
It is a very neatio style! And I think you did it very well.
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It is called a loop poem, I’ve learned. Thanks…I have a lot to learn.
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But you have the professor figured out!
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I don’t either. I wish I did, Duke. I should write a loop poem about that dadblamery!! Dadblameit!
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You should! I love loops.
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You’re looking for trouble, Sir.
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(I always find it in the middle loop.)
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My favorite part…
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Very well done.xx
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Thank you, Willow. I’m glad I tried this form. xxx
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Yes it is a compelling style.
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🙂
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Yeah, you did a loop poem. Wonderful. I, myself just learned about the loop poem form and wrote one recently. You’ve already read it:
http://stacilys.wordpress.com/2014/09/02/co-creations/ and commented too. I’m really enjoying learning about and experimenting with the forms that exist.
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I remember that, Staci. Thanks for reminding me. Yours is wonderful and I’m glad I got to read it again. 🙂 I think working with forms is a nice change, since I’m normally all over the place. Thank you for thinking mine was okay. I’ll try a loop poem again, for sure. 🙂
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What? Are you nuts? Just okay? Yours wasn’t just okay, my friend. It’s WONDERFUL. And might I add, very intelligently worked. 2 thumbs up girl.
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I very much like how you wove in different things, bringing together what I wouldn’t have thought were connected… dreams and circles and fingers and love. But then again, that’s the mark of a poem that hits true. And you hit it.
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*sigh* Okay, I know it does seem a bit rambled, and may only make sense to me, but I’m relieved that you see there is a connection there, as well, Gus. I’m thankful you think so… I’ve never claimed to know what I’m doing poetically. I just write the words down and hope someone else gets it, too. You’re a great support, my dear.
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I think the beauty of poetry is that it’s deeply personal — but also the experience can be different for the writer and different readers. The connections flow out of you into the poem and make sense to you. Then the reader may make other connections that are different. But then, there are some poems out there that I read and don’t connect with me on any level.
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Yes Gus, I agree. I write for me first, but man does it feel good when another creative soul reads it and makes it their own for their personal reasons. True creative fulfillment, I’d say. I think like minded people identify with the same emotions, but then for totally different reasons. Way cool, huh? 🙂 There is a ton of poetry that I’ve read and had to search comment sections to understand. I wish I was smart enough to go that deep. I envy their abilities. However, I’m a simple lady and enjoy writing poems everyone can understand on some level, whether its the literal or the metaphorical twist I slide in for amusement and complete enjoyment.
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Awesome, Aud, in a style that I assume takes lots of patience.
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Thank you, Zak! It did take patience, but after last week it was nice to work around limitations. ♡
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Wow, wow, wow. Much better than mine. I think you should try another one of those. That was truly amazing. So many lines I liked. This part is exceptional: “How is the question that will continue a circle / Circle is the shape for the ring of promise”.
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Ha. Look at those wows…thanks, Benjamin. Your poem is fantastic. Much better than mine, but I appreciate your saying so… I like that part, as well. And it’s true. I may have another one or five laying around. They just came out of me after reading yours. A more postive feeling group of poems, too.
Thanks again for allowing me to piggyback your style a bit. 🙂
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You’re welcome. You can piggyback me anytime, of course. I honestly like yours more but thanks so much. I can’t wait to see the rest. It seems we both like the same part a lot then. We’re getting good at the daul-liking stuff.
Have a great night!
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Great to hear, B. You’re attempting to be a sugar-heart, aren’t you? 😉 Maybe men aren’t called that, however. You really are very kind. Thank you. We’re quite a liking team, I suppose. 🙂
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Yes, yes. I agree :). I don’t know, but I’ll be a sugar-heart if you’re calling me one. You’re very kind, too. Truly. Honestly.
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🙂 You’re Flirty B…mostly. I believe you. Truly. Honestly.
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I’m only a little flirty 🙂 Thanks.
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Okay, well, I will try and take your comments more seriously. Serious business happening here, I know.
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Haha, yes! 🙂
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🙂 Very serious.
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🙂 very.
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😉
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Beautiful! I love Benjamin’s work, it’s nice that you find it inspiring, I think it is, really 🙂 take care :-)♥
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Thank you, Frédéric. ♡ I admire his talent, and ran across this form last week reading his blog. He is inspiring, but so are you, so very much. Have a wonderful evening, my dear. 🙂
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Great job Auds. There are many poetic forms and I encourage you to explore them. (I don’t have the patience)
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Thank you, Sir. Lately, I’ve been gravitating towards the structure of a ruled poem. Craving limits, I guess. Plus it keeps my mind focused on what I want to accomplish. I will do more of them, of course. I appreciate your encouragement. (You have plenty of patience…)
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Very clever Auds
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That’s me. Clever… 😉
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